Tuesday, August 11, 2009

The breath God gave me.

Cancel the thoughts you were thinking, 
The pressure in this place can crush,
Gravity causes my soul to start sinking.
Red painted hearts with death around the crust.

I will never trust because i am aware,
Cowards can never cower,
Even the red pointed beast couldn't scare.
I believe in a higher power.

My being is solid like rock of the thickest mountain,
My blood flows free ,
My inner core changes shape from life of the fountain.
My life will always be.

To see me would be a leap for most,
Look me in the eyes,
To grasp my concept would turn your life into a host.
Making you apart of my cause in hope.
I stand below the lies.

Try the tricky geometry i call me,
For me and my other parts are one,
I am the light sparkling on the sea.
Even when dark I'm apart of the sun.

Carbon bubbles up from my surface to show confliction,
My soul will not stand still,
I am outer space, for my space there's no restriction.
But venture to far and i will kill.

I race to a place that's out of grasp,
Will you keep pace?
I find beauty in what you think is trash.
What will you call my case?

Unready to give up things that aren't visible,
Unsure of things that don't change,
Uninterested in places that are livable.
Understanding of things that are strange.

Cant you keep my stride if i sprint?
Can you feel my insides scream?
Cant you avoid the things that tempt?
Can you really trust that I'm what i seem?

You can see me sprout from the ground,
But my roots stretch forever underneath.
You can feel my voice without a sound,
You will feel me even if existence is brief.

The breath God gave me.


 

2 comments:

  1. Ok ok ok...

    wow, where to begin. First off, I love the concept of 'you might think you know me, and you might know me a little but you don't really know me' The control you have and portray here. The concept also continues with 'I am who I am because I was meant to be this way'

    I like the repitition that is so carefully placed throughout, yet not overwhelming or too much.

    More than just similar letters the My x 4 and then the U's and C's, you see ;) (I see)

    I like that it repeats with Un Un Un Un and then Cant Can Cant Can.

    The last stanza is incredibly powerful and visual.

    I just can't believe you spat out 10 stanza's JUST LIKE THAT! Crazy fast!

    Love it and I love you

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  2. This is what I have wanted from you the whole time.
    The metaphors are amazing. I am impressed at how far you were able to go with in your self for this one. I can only hope you stay on this calibur of writing. I think this one needs to be sent it. The email adrs. should still be in your sent folder.
    I was quiet because it is that good.

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